Need help with resume critique please!!

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narako9 in Aurora, Colorado 7 months ago	imageshack.us/photo/my-images/80/resume1.jpg/ imageshack.us/photo/my-images/522/resume2.jpg/ I know the objective should be specific to the job and company but this is just a general resume to hand out in job fairs and such. when i do apply usually the "To acquire employment in a corporation" part is replaced with the position, but i'm not really happy with the second part of the objective, any suggestions on that specifically and of course the whole thing needs to be look at :) Thank you in advance for all your help!! - Was this comment helpful? Yes / No Reply - Report abuse
TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia 7 months ago	thres1234us in Charlotte, North Carolina said: I edit resume's for individuals and my costs are very low. I'd be wary of using the editing services of someone who misuses the apostrophe like that. - Was this comment helpful? Yes (4) / No Reply - Report abuse
Narako9 7 months ago	Tryinghard you made me laugh. - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia 7 months ago	Narako9 said: Tryinghard you made me laugh. I aim to please. On a serious note, I looked at your resume. It's decent, but I'd suggest using quantifiable data. For instance, don't just say you served people, give an estimate of how many people you served (for instance, say "Tutored 20 students in..."). Also, give examples of things you did that made you stand out at those jobs. In your resume you just listed the typical things you did, but what really made you stand out from the rest? Good luck to you in your job search! - Was this comment helpful? Yes (2) / No Reply - Report abuse
Narako9 in Aurora, Colorado 7 months ago	TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia said: I aim to please. On a serious note, I looked at your resume. It's decent, but I'd suggest using quantifiable data. For instance, don't just say you served people, give an estimate of how many people you served (for instance, say "Tutored 20 students in..."). Also, give examples of things you did that made you stand out at those jobs. In your resume you just listed the typical things you did, but what really made you stand out from the rest? Good luck to you in your job search! Thanks for those points, and if anyone else got any thing else they world like to point out please do. - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
hrnasty 7 months ago	I agree with Naroko9. Quantifiable data. Use numbers where ever possible. Increased "this" by "x", or decreased that by "y". As to the objective statement, I like objective statements that say WHO you are vs. WHAT you are looking for. When you say WHO you are, you put the reader in a very different mindset vs "WHAT" you are looking for. WHAT literally puts the reader into the mindset that you begging for a job". i have some thoughts here on objective statement. bit.ly/oOwikl If this is for a career fair, I would say that 95% of the candidates that show up to the job fair are blowing it. If you go to a booth and ask "what do you do?" forget it. Good luck HRNasty dot com - Was this comment helpful? Yes / No Reply - Report abuse
hrnasty 7 months ago	I agree with Naroko9. Quantifiable data. Use numbers where ever possible. Increased "this" by "x", or decreased that by "y". Increases using numbers or percentages always show quantity. As a recruiter, I am not able to go to a hiring manager and say "johnny is an experienced trainer". I can say "Johnny trained 20 employees and 5 new training plans". As to the objective statement, I like objective statements that say WHO you are vs. WHAT you are looking for. When you say WHO you are, you put the reader in a very different mindset vs "WHAT" you are looking for. WHAT literally puts the reader into the mindset that you begging for a job". i have some thoughts here on objective statement. If this is for a career fair, I would say that 95% of the candidates that show up to the job fair are blowing it. If you go to a booth and ask "what do you do?" forget it. Good luck HRNasty - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia 7 months ago	hrnasty said: I agree with Naroko9. You mean you agree with me. Naroko9's the one asking for the advice, and in that instance I was the one who gave it. - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia 7 months ago	Pardon me, I meant Narako9, not "Naroko9." - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
Randy Lew in Prague, Czech Republic 7 months ago	With mild grammar errors, I think that you've done quite well. Don't forget to add contact information, and a brief summary of your candidacy in the beginning (around the Objective part). - Was this comment helpful? Yes / No Reply - Report abuse
TryingHardToFindWork in Arlington, Virginia 7 months ago	Randy Lew in Prague, Czech Republic said: Don't forget to add contact information... The person knows to post their contact information in their actual resume, they just have the common sense not to post it online and risk identity theft. Tsk, tsk. - Was this comment helpful? Yes (1) / No Reply - Report abuse
George in Washington, District of Columbia 7 months ago	Yes, I would also recommend to check and edit your paper with professionals, same I did with mine. I can advice you a site who provides editing service for free of charge though they write resumes on a payment basis. - Was this comment helpful? Yes / No Reply - Report abuse

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